First lines are the most important lines in the story. Here are some of mine from stories and books I've sold:
There were four black and whites already at the 7-Eleven when I arrived. -- WHISKEY SOUR
"It would be so easy to kill you while you sleep." -- BLOODY MARY
The sound begins. Again. -- RUSTY NAIL
No security cameras this time, but he still has to be careful. --DIRTY MARTINI
"She sure bled a lot." -- ON THE ROCKS
"His skull is shattered and his spinal column looks like a dutch pretzel." -- WITH A TWIST
Mitch couldn't answer me with the barrel of my gun in his mouth, so I pulled it out. -- STREET MUSIC
"I want you to kill the man that my husband hired to kill the man that I hired to kill my husband." -- TAKEN TO THE CLEANERS
The woman twisting the tube into my penis has cold hands. -- FORGIVENESS
"That's gotta be where the money is." -- THE SHED
Hudson closed his eyes and swallowed hard, trying to stop sweating. -- THE AGREEMENT
There's an art to getting your ass kicked. -- EPITAPH
"I want you to kill my wife." -- SUFFER
"Let me get this straight--you want me to murder you tonight?" -- REDUX
"Eat it." -- FINICKY EATER
The mark knelt next to a garbage can, two hands unsuccessfully trying to plug nine holes in his face, neck, and upper body. -- LIGHT DRIZZLE
"No thanks." -- THE BAG
Rust from the crowbar flaked off, coating my palm with orange dust. -- BASKET CASE
Voice Module 195567 Record Mode: Is this thing working? -- SYMBIOS
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Some are stronger than others. Why? What makes a first line good or bad?
Feel free to post some of your favorites.
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